Here's the prompts I used.
1. Use the items broken glass, tree house, and sign.
2. Use the words. She knew he was coming back. He must come back. Their very lives depended on it.
I don't know, but it seems to me that when I do these writing contests with prompts, my writing always comes out just a little more morbid than usual. I have no idea where this idea came from. I guess I like to be able to explore different ideas without committing myself to a full length story.
Anyway, I hope you like it. It came out at 297 words.
The girl hovered, careful to stay above the glass-strewn
floor. She propelled herself to the empty window casing and peered out. Branches
blocked the house, but she could see the yard, overgrown and neglected. She
felt sorry for the struggling flowers among the weeds in the abandoned bed. She
was flower. Alone and forgotten. Maybe after tonight she wouldn’t be. Maybe she
would give her message and her soul could cross over. She turned from the
dreary scene and scanned the tree house. She had to stop the accident. Save the
little girl and her parents. She’d come yesterday, but touching objects
exhausted her and she hadn’t finished the sign. She’d gotten half of it
written. On a yellowed scrap of paper, placed here for her years ago. Don’t go. She braced and gripped the
pencil. It pricked like needles and she whimpered. On. The. Trip. She dropped it and clutched her hand. Time faded the
sting. She waited. She knew he was coming back. He must come back. Their very
lives depended on it. A sound on the ladder. Hands came through the hole in the
floor, then a head, followed by a body. The man looked tired and sad as he
looked around. He’d not changed since the first time she saw him, when she’d
slipped from her newly entered world. His eyes fell on the paper. A thrill ran
through her as his eyes widened. He read it. She succeeded. He disappeared down
the ladder again, urgency ringing in his steps. She watched him, resisting the
pull to cross realms for just a little longer. “Goodbye,” She said softly, her voice to him just a slight
disturbance in the air. She hesitated. She wanted to say it. Just once, before
she left him. “Daddy.”
I really enjoyed your entry! You are very good writer and I love your blog!
ReplyDeleteMickayla
pencilscanchangetheworld.blogspot.com
Thanks very much! And thanks for commenting :)
ReplyDeleteThat was awesome!!;)
ReplyDeleteGood job, Maddie!
ReplyDelete-Emily and Mary
Thank you :)
DeleteThis I like this, I love your writing Maddie.
ReplyDeleteThanks Skye :) I haven't gotten to re-reading your Beauty and the beast story but I was going to try to tomorrow afternoon. I haven't forgotten!
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